-Love the interaction with Leo throughout
-In the Mars candy bar story (and ‘process’ stories), make it about the plastic found or the trigger of the process before the process itself (someone finds plastic and a candy bar so the Mars candy company is pulling back candy in 55 countries…)
-Love the way you comment and outright laugh about the postman/drivers license story! This is a great way to end a flash
-The postman bit ended up going too long when everyone got involved…it was well over 2 minutes from the start of the story to the end of the comments.
-These don’t sound open to the listener enough, they are too much about you.
-Make sure this is positioned as something like ‘all the crap we all try to avoid in life happens to Sandra’ or something that puts this in an ‘us’ context. Also say things like ‘well everyone does this’ or ‘this happens to everyone’ to involve us all when you can