Liz Ruiz, 10am July 6, 2015
Listen to that writing! Several of these stories are very well written with short first lines, present tense that does not sound forced, and the action first.
Liz makes it sound like there’s a lot going on. Excellent!
Frank’s piece about a minute in is simply way too fast. He talks so fast he loses any impact for what he is saying. His audio is cut so fast it just sounds like jump cuts. And he says his name so fast you can’t even understand it. This is a writing issue. He needs to be able to write better so that he can say more in fewer words, and use inflections to help change tone or topic.