Three Things…

1) Breaking news.  Different mode.  Slow it down, space it out more.  Update frequently exactly as you do, then find the story to focus on (screams heard in the final moments, what must it have been like, etc)

2) GREAT content and style on Indiana law.  You are pausing more, which makes you sound more thoughtful.  And instead of talking about a law, or legislation, or a bill, or constitutional amendments, in this analogy you are talking about a guy and a tragedy.

3) This intro is just too long, given that we have to wait nine minutes to get to it and in less than five you will be gone for virtually the rest of the half hour.  I would dispense with the promos, do a quick weather and get right to the story from above (which actually came at minute 28) to bring me into the Indiana Law.