The main benchmark:
-At 3.20 this did just way too long. It really needs to be 2.00 max.
-Good start but you can hear it lose focus. It goes from crazy Portuguese cuisine to just three people talking about food.
-Nobody is really smiling and having fun here.
-There is not a lot of the listener in this. It needs either listener stories or call to action much stronger and earlier.
The followup, listener reaction…
-You have to reset the topic, loudly but very short
-These are good, fast reactions. This is the tone and “interactivity” you want in the cut above.
-I want to hear more of you mixed in this.
-This could have been a little longer!