What’s Working…

Chemistry between John and Liz is even better.  And Liz’s energy is completely different from a few months ago!

Great stories on a Monday!  Less crime!  More sound!

The self intro’s are working well. They make the team and coverage sound bigger

 

What needs some attention…

The writing is better but still sounding clunky and “wire”like (first example below)

The hour open is exaggerated and the music montage doesn’t quite fit.  Also John and Liz should always be talking to me, not welcoming each other between themselves  (second example below).

I suggest that in the hour open they say good morning and then get right into the first story.  The music montage, which is a fabulous idea, should close the first segment or close the hour.  It’s a closer not an opener, but definitely very valuable in the show.

 

Audio Examples…

Writing…

WIBW-NewsDayNow-05-Writing Sample

 

Hour Open with a little too much spunk…

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